Can you please read over my bio on obama and edit? please!?


Please help me and read this over and tell me of any mistakes in grammer or use of words. please thanks.

Barack Hussein Obama II
BIOGRAPHY
Barak Obama is a graduate of Columbia University and Harvard Law. He majored in Political science with a specialization of in International Relations. Obama also…

OK so I changed a few things. I put the things I changed in paretheses.

Barack Hussein Obama II
BIOGRAPHY
Barak Obama is a graduate of Columbia University and Harvard Law. He majored in Political science with a specialization of in International Relations. Obama also served as a president at the Harvard Law review. He has (took out the word also) worked as a community organizer and practiced as a civil rights attorney before serving in the Senate in Illinois from 1997 to 2004. He taught constitutional law at the University of Chicago School as well. Obama was elected to the Illinois Senate in 1996 (, and considering) he was very well liked he was reelected for Illinois Senate in 1998 and again in 2002. He voted in favor of the Energy policy Act of 2005 and cosponsored the Secure America and Orderly Immigration act(; he) has also supported the bill for the Secure Fence Act. Obama has supported (took out is) the State Children’s Health Insurance Program which provides job protection for family members caring for soldiers. He has always said (he would) withdraw American troops from Iraq and talked about energy independence. In July 2004(,) Obama wrote and delivered the keynote address at the 2004 Democratic Convention National Convention in Boston, Massachusetts. Obama considered running for the U.S senate in mid-2002 (in) which he actually got sworn into on January 4th, 2005. He was listed as the fifth African American senator in U.S. history and third to have been popularly elected. On February 10, 2007(,) Obama announced his candidacy for being the president of the United States.

line 2 correct (of in)
line 3 don’t say “also” again. rewrite
Before serving in the Senate in Illinois from 1997 to 2004, He worked as a community organizer and practiced as a civil rights attorney .
line 5 He later taught constitutional law at the University of Chicago
Popular with the voters, Obama was elected to the Illinois Senate in 1996. He easily won reelection in 1998 and 2002.

line 9 correct “has supported is the State ”
He opposed the war in Iraq from the beginning and is pushing for a withdrawl of American troops at the earliest possible moment.
Obama is a proponent of energy independence

Obama first considered running for the U.S senate in mid-2002 and by January 4th, 2005 he was sworn into office.

Obama announced his candidacy for President of the United States.

Sure:

Change
Barack Hussein Obama II
BIOGRAPHY
Barak Obama is a graduate of Columbia University and Harvard Law. He majored in Political science with a specialization of in International Relations. Obama also served as a president at the Harvard Law review. He has also worked as a community organizer and practiced as a civil rights attorney before serving in the Senate in Illinois from 1997 to 2004. He taught constitutional law at the University of Chicago School as well. Obama was elected to the Illinois Senate in 1996. Considering he was very well liked he was reelected for Illinois Senate in 1998 and again in 2002. He voted in favor of the Energy policy Act of 2005 and cosponsored the Secure America and Orderly Immigration act. He has also supported the bill for the Secure Fence Act. Obama has supported is the State Children’s Health Insurance Program which provides job protection for family members caring for soldiers. He has always said to withdraw American troops from Iraq and talked about energy independence. In July 2004 Obama wrote and delivered the keynote address at the 2004 Democratic Convention National Convention in Boston, Massachusetts. Obama considered running for the U.S senate in mid-2002 and which he actually got sworn into on January 4th, 2005. He was listed as the fifth African American senator in U.S history and third to have been popularly elected. On February 10, 2007 Obama announced his candidacy for being the president of the United States.

CHANGE TO:

B. Hussein Obama is a muslim supporting liberal communist on an egotistical narcissistic quest to be president of the UNited States through the fluff speaking and brainwashing of lost youtube youth, age 25 and under who have simple minds and are susceptible to any slick speaker who can promise them a utopia.

there are just a few typos (unnecessary words are in brackets):

1…with a specialization [of] in International Relations

2. Obama has supported [is] the State Children’s Health Insurance Program

3…running for the U.S senate in mid-2002 and [which he actually got] sworn into on January 4th, 2005 – replace those words with “was”.

4. …He was listed as the fifth African American – should it be “was” or “IS listed”

Other than that it is good.

What did he do from 1961 until 1997?

It should read “On October 7, 2007 he announced himself as the biggest tool, sellout in the history of the U.S. since the likes of Bennedict Arnold among others.-Vomit”

in case you intend to make it slightly longer, you will be able to desire to upload that once he become first elected, yet in the previous he become sworn in, his spouse and daughter have been killed in a vehicle twist of destiny, and his 2 sons badly injured. additionally, basically before election to the Senate, he become a Councilman for the city of Wilmington. additionally, on the time of his p.c.. by Obama, Biden become chairman of the Senate foreign places family members Committee, and he previously chaired the Judiciary Committee.

Did you mention Resco in his resume, how about his grandma bashing, or the abortion issue in which he voted for the murder of children? How about the games he played while in congress by voting on issues and then recanted just to annul the vote?

Yuo forgot to mention he’s possibly the worst candiate for president we’ve ever had. Hahaha

No, but seriously, I didn’t see and flaws. Nice work.

“He has always said to withdraw American troops from Iraq and talked about energy independence” should be changed to “He has consistently pushed for withdrawal from Iraq and energy independence. Sounds better. Otherwise, it’s very good and very well-researched. Ignore the haters.

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