This isn’t my story, i just made this up on the spot. So if its random, or just plain stupid, my apologies. If there are any mistakes, I’m sorry. Yahoo has trouble keeping up with a lot of words. 😛
I looked up at the rich navy blue sky and gazed with awe as i watched the bright flashing stars fall…
You writing style is really awesome!
im actually trying to write a novel myself but i constantly have trouble with the descriptive parts
but you just seem to be a natural at it & imagination if you made this up on the spot
Wanna check out my short story?
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It’s not bad, needs some working to be done in certain grammar criterions, but overall, good effort 😉 I’m 16 btw, I write articles and stories as well.
I like it & don’t think it’s choppy at all.
You seem to have noticed the capitalization, so I won’t point that out.
I like the details & I’d probably read more(:
Answer Mine ?
Eh. It’s written okay, but I didn’t go past the first paragraph. You didn’t hook me.
Work on a hook, basically.